Hi Savannah, I want to first start off by saying I enjoyed reading your analysis. I also loved how you pointed out an important detail and that was how “the governor disregarded Yi’s rights to his wife as if he was too common even though he was of a generally high class.” It seems that regardless of an individual’s class power trumped class and morality. You spoke about the four social classes, then you listed three: common people, the economic leaders, and influential positions of power. What was the forth class? It was not clear of the fourth class? What if you listed each class and examples of how the governor ignored each of them and how the definition of morality is diminished when compared to the four classes or is it because of how the governor views these four classes is the reason why he does not extend the morality rule to them?
Hello Savannah! Great work on your first project submission! I really enjoyed how you analyzed Chun-Hyang's role in her story! I agree with what you say about gender equality and how the governor appeared to treat women. He seemed really uninterested in the other kisaeng that were brought to him, only being interested in Chun-Hyang herself and even after learning that she was married, would not allow her to adhere to her virtues and punished her severely when she refused to be his wife. Its unfortunate that people like this existed in reality. I also like how you explain about Ch'un-Hyang's character and why the author would choose someone like her to take a stand. She was extremely brave and virtuous and would not budge, even when being beaten severely. This is probably why she is beloved as a heroine throughout Korean literature! Great work and I can't wait to see more from you!
Savannah, your project was incredibly detailed And that is one of the many reasons why it was so incredible. I liked how you touched note on the fact that what the story was about something that pertains to how life is now and we can apply it to our everyday lives and even, looking at how it would affect society today, we can get a more in-depth understanding of this story. Every single topic sentence to your paragraphs were incredibly strong. I especially love the part where he started talking about being willing to fall for what you are willing to stand for. The only thing that I would change about your project is that I think a couple of the paragraphs do not need to be separated because they follow the same ideas. For example, the paragraph where you start off with “The fight for gender equality“ could be combined with the paragraph right afterwards because they both follow the same topic. Overall, I am very impressed by your work and I love the passion and effort you put into everything over and I cannot wait to read more from you! Outstanding job.
Hi Savannah! I enjoyed reading your project submission! it was great work. good job! I like how you perfectly situated each and every paragraph and had great transitions leading into each paragraph. It helped organize your essay rather thoroughly. I liked your use of quotes to provide examples and evidence to back up your evidence. Maybe you could have explained the examples just a little more. I loved the part where you mentioned that it was a competition between Buddhism and Confucianism because I can’t help but agree although I did not entirely notice that before you mentioned it. But now that I see, it definitely is true. I would also like to mention your conclusion because it is one of the best I have read and really tied your essay together perfectly. Great Job! Altogether, your essay was a great piece of work to read and I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work!
Hello Savannah! I have to say this project is very well put together! The opener was really strong and attention grabbing, which made me want to read more. This story definitely has a lot of character depth and I feel as though you really did a great job exploring the different themes within it. Also, I really like the whole organization of your project. Each topic sentence gives you a strong sense of what will be explained in the body of the paragraphs. And your thesis is very well put together and easy to follow. You concluding paragraphs are the strongest part of your paper because you did such a great jobs tying all of the depth of the themes together. I know this is the final revision and I have to say there isn't anything I can see that would need to be worked on. Great job Savannah, I look forward to reading your future projects to see what else you come up with.
Hi Savannah! I really enjoyed reading your project! It turned out really great! You have great, valid points and you definitely find great quotes to support that. I like how you incorporate some history and background in your project, as I think it really adds a little bit more to your project. It's nice to be able to get a little bit more background about something; as if it gives us a better understanding of everything. If anything, I think paragraph 5 was a little long (very minor, I know), but otherwise it was interesting to read.
Hi Savannah! I want to start by saying that your project is well put together and it was nice to read. I really like the the topic that you chose. The different messages that are present in the stories you chose and why they are important. I like how you discussed religion and the moral aspects that are presented in religion. It was nice to see not only the similar aspects of different religions but the differences. I liked how you stated that most religions have a "Do no harm" rule. Another thing that I enjoyed was how you related it back to your own life and how you drew inspiration from that. Very nice use of quotations they supported your examples well. it was nice to see the comparison between modern day writers and writers from the past. I think you did an excellent job I look forward to reading more of your work.
Hey Savannah! I just read your project submission from week 10. I hope you don't mind if I comment on this comment wall since I was unable to find week 10's comment wall in your blog labels. I found your introduction to be very interesting as I liked the point you made about how death is a common ground we share with everyone. It honestly makes me sad that everything and everyone has to reach their end eventually which is just part of life and can't be changed. I thought you did well to show all three of the author's approach towards death as they romanticized and admired it. I liked that you showed that in Boudeloir's writing, he shows a detailed and vivid description of death whereas in Ghalib's poems, he despises death because he thinks his beloved wife and nephew died too soon but he also romanticizes it because he knows through death, he'll be able to reunite with his family as he believes in the afterlife. There were two elements I wasn't sure was necessary in your poem as I thought in the second paragraph, you focused too much context on Dickenson rather than she's saying in her literary poems. Also,I had a tough time knowing what was your overall thesis as you didn't mention it in the opening paragraph. My guess was that you were trying to argue that three of the author's romanticize and welcome death as living is pointless for them. That's just my guess.
Hi Savannah, I want to first start off by saying I enjoyed reading your analysis. I also loved how you pointed out an important detail and that was how “the governor disregarded Yi’s rights to his wife as if he was too common even though he was of a generally high class.” It seems that regardless of an individual’s class power trumped class and morality.
ReplyDeleteYou spoke about the four social classes, then you listed three: common people, the economic leaders, and influential positions of power. What was the forth class? It was not clear of the fourth class? What if you listed each class and examples of how the governor ignored each of them and how the definition of morality is diminished when compared to the four classes or is it because of how the governor views these four classes is the reason why he does not extend the morality rule to them?
Excellent work.
Thank you for pointing out that I missed the fourth! I did not realize I missed that and included it in my next revision! Thank you!
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ReplyDeleteGreat work on your first project submission! I really enjoyed how you analyzed Chun-Hyang's role in her story! I agree with what you say about gender equality and how the governor appeared to treat women. He seemed really uninterested in the other kisaeng that were brought to him, only being interested in Chun-Hyang herself and even after learning that she was married, would not allow her to adhere to her virtues and punished her severely when she refused to be his wife. Its unfortunate that people like this existed in reality. I also like how you explain about Ch'un-Hyang's character and why the author would choose someone like her to take a stand. She was extremely brave and virtuous and would not budge, even when being beaten severely. This is probably why she is beloved as a heroine throughout Korean literature! Great work and I can't wait to see more from you!
Savannah, your project was incredibly detailed And that is one of the many reasons why it was so incredible. I liked how you touched note on the fact that what the story was about something that pertains to how life is now and we can apply it to our everyday lives and even, looking at how it would affect society today, we can get a more in-depth understanding of this story. Every single topic sentence to your paragraphs were incredibly strong. I especially love the part where he started talking about being willing to fall for what you are willing to stand for. The only thing that I would change about your project is that I think a couple of the paragraphs do not need to be separated because they follow the same ideas. For example, the paragraph where you start off with “The fight for gender equality“ could be combined with the paragraph right afterwards because they both follow the same topic. Overall, I am very impressed by your work and I love the passion and effort you put into everything over and I cannot wait to read more from you! Outstanding job.
ReplyDeleteHi Savannah! I enjoyed reading your project submission! it was great work. good job! I like how you perfectly situated each and every paragraph and had great transitions leading into each paragraph. It helped organize your essay rather thoroughly. I liked your use of quotes to provide examples and evidence to back up your evidence. Maybe you could have explained the examples just a little more. I loved the part where you mentioned that it was a competition between Buddhism and Confucianism because I can’t help but agree although I did not entirely notice that before you mentioned it. But now that I see, it definitely is true. I would also like to mention your conclusion because it is one of the best I have read and really tied your essay together perfectly. Great Job! Altogether, your essay was a great piece of work to read and I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHello Savannah!
ReplyDeleteI have to say this project is very well put together! The opener was really strong and attention grabbing, which made me want to read more. This story definitely has a lot of character depth and I feel as though you really did a great job exploring the different themes within it. Also, I really like the whole organization of your project. Each topic sentence gives you a strong sense of what will be explained in the body of the paragraphs. And your thesis is very well put together and easy to follow. You concluding paragraphs are the strongest part of your paper because you did such a great jobs tying all of the depth of the themes together. I know this is the final revision and I have to say there isn't anything I can see that would need to be worked on. Great job Savannah, I look forward to reading your future projects to see what else you come up with.
Hi Savannah! I really enjoyed reading your project! It turned out really great! You have great, valid points and you definitely find great quotes to support that. I like how you incorporate some history and background in your project, as I think it really adds a little bit more to your project. It's nice to be able to get a little bit more background about something; as if it gives us a better understanding of everything. If anything, I think paragraph 5 was a little long (very minor, I know), but otherwise it was interesting to read.
ReplyDeleteHi Savannah!
ReplyDeleteI want to start by saying that your project is well put together and it was nice to read. I really like the the topic that you chose. The different messages that are present in the stories you chose and why they are important. I like how you discussed religion and the moral aspects that are presented in religion. It was nice to see not only the similar aspects of different religions but the differences. I liked how you stated that most religions have a "Do no harm" rule. Another thing that I enjoyed was how you related it back to your own life and how you drew inspiration from that. Very nice use of quotations they supported your examples well. it was nice to see the comparison between modern day writers and writers from the past. I think you did an excellent job I look forward to reading more of your work.
Hey Savannah! I just read your project submission from week 10. I hope you don't mind if I comment on this comment wall since I was unable to find week 10's comment wall in your blog labels. I found your introduction to be very interesting as I liked the point you made about how death is a common ground we share with everyone. It honestly makes me sad that everything and everyone has to reach their end eventually which is just part of life and can't be changed. I thought you did well to show all three of the author's approach towards death as they romanticized and admired it. I liked that you showed that in Boudeloir's writing, he shows a detailed and vivid description of death whereas in Ghalib's poems, he despises death because he thinks his beloved wife and nephew died too soon but he also romanticizes it because he knows through death, he'll be able to reunite with his family as he believes in the afterlife. There were two elements I wasn't sure was necessary in your poem as I thought in the second paragraph, you focused too much context on Dickenson rather than she's saying in her literary poems. Also,I had a tough time knowing what was your overall thesis as you didn't mention it in the opening paragraph. My guess was that you were trying to argue that three of the author's romanticize and welcome death as living is pointless for them. That's just my guess.
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