Project Revisions: First Round

The three Editing Challenges that I chose to use on my project were ... 

Answer the Question with  a Clear, Debatable Thesis: 

"We as a society benefit when authors illustrate the weakness of moral grounding that may have otherwise gone unquestioned, as well as to lend the reader  strength via the example of their characters actions. "

Organizational Blueprint: 

Strength of a lower class citizen - "These examples of bravery in the face of abusive power illustrate a life of struggle that can be seen even today in Korea and throughout the world."  

Gender and class - "The fight for gender equality, conspicuously against women in lower social classes is shown clearly to the eyes of a modern reader in this tale." 
"The author shows that a woman can be strong and should be strong when she is morally justified for her stance."

Differentiation of status - "Ch'un-Hyang does not only encompass the issues of gender, but also the issue of the differentiation of citizens lack of power, respect, and influence in the face of oppressive political power."  

"The author is telling the common people that no one is safe from the ruling class, and no one can hold their leaders accountable but them. They must be active in their civic life and speak to their leaders and hold them accountable for their immoral actions against them." 

 Morality of Do No Harm - "In The Song of Ch'un-Hyang the guards and executioner have a conflict between their duties and their moral understanding of their duties “What sort of men are we, who can do nothing to help a girl like that!” (81). They know that they should follow their command, but the law does not call for their violent action." What to do in the face of abusive power? 

Shift of Belief from Buddhism and Confucianism and the author showing peaceful transition under universal understanding of morality - "The historical and cultural shift of belief from Buddhism to Confucianism was in progress and the author is showing a peaceful transition under universal understanding of morality. Those who stand on morally solid ground no mater the name of their religion could agree that the treatment of Ch'un-Hyang was morally corrupt. "

Conclusion - "Their works were progressive and held a mirror to the cultural ear in which they lived in an attempt to awaken a thoughtful response to the issues. Due to their literary contributions they were able to influence the people of their time, and we now are able to understand the past we emerged from."

Make a point, don't summarize: 

This I tried to work on. However, I am a bit stuck. Since my text doesn't provide an author or any background on the author, my argument is what I feel the text was meant to achieve and I use the text to back up this thesis with quotes and interpretations. So I hope i did it right. 


https://sites.google.com/view/journey-with-me/life-worth-living-an-analysis-of-historic-wisdom